I see absolutely everything. The eye pulls me in, deeper and deeper. I see past actions and how they influenced the present ones. I see that the decisions made today determine the course of events for tomorrow. I see sorrow, pain, mutilation. I see the screams of both the damned and the innocent. It cannot be. It must not be!
Breathing heavily, I pull myself away from the hypnotic eye. Sweat trickles from my hairline into my eye. The saltiness of it stings, as does the task that lies ahead of me. I did not ask for this: to be the one who will “save the “day”. But do it I must or our world may not survive. I take a deep breath. The first thing I need to do is to find allies who are strong and true.
Who will the allies be?
© Colline Kook-Chun, 2015
This story was inspired by Mondays Finish the Story. Each week bloggers are encouraged to write a story of 100-150 words based on a photo prompt and sentence starter)
“The eye pulls me in, deeper and deeper. I see past actions and how they influenced the present ones. I see that the decisions made today determine the course of events for tomorrow.” Chills, Colline…this gave me chills! Loved it!
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Thank you Gracie. 🙂
Glad you enjoyed today’s chilling read.
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Great voice! I reckon the allies have to be tough cookies 🙂
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I think they will have to be for the task that lays ahead.
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Sounds like the beginning of an epic tale. Excellent writing!
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Thank you Yolanda. I am glad you enjoyed the read.
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Great story…seeing everything is the first step and hopefully others will take notice as well and join in to help. (incidently, this is the action we need today….changes are really needed!)
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I agree with you. If we do not work on the way things are going in our world, we will surely come to nothing.
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What a predicament! 😯
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Hopefully with the help of good friends she can change the situation 🙂
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interesting result from todays prompt.
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Thank you. Certainly not the first thing you think of when you look at an eye 🙂
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What a great opening for a story. I can see you taking this somewhere Colline! Excellent! Thank you for writing for the MFtS challenge and be well… ^..^
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Thank you. The story definitely has the potential to be extended.
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Excellent Colline! I see that a person with much wisdom is writing this and letting the rest of the world know the dire consequence if we don’t do something now.
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Thank you so much for your compliment. I appreciate it.
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Compelling opening lines! Nice story
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Thank you so much for your positive comment.
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Excellent!!! I was drawn into the quest to save the world. Well done!!!
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Thank you. The character now has some convincing to do to get others on board 🙂
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Great story, Colline. I love how you used the prompt as a call to action. 🙂
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Thank you so much. And thank you for reading.
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Oh my!!! we must all band together as allies!!! Great piece my dear!
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We certainly must! Thank you 🙂
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Great story. And that eye!!
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Thank you Michelle – though I cannot take credit for the eye 🙂
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A lovely thought allies and friends uniting in thought to mend the future ~ 🙂
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Plenty of strength can be gained from allies 🙂
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A beautifully written story, Colline. I hope they find a good group of allies to help save the day! Really well done. 🙂
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Thank you very much. I hope that they do too 🙂
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The call to save the world.
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It certainly is 🙂
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I could hear determined voices in your words! Well done!
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Thank you. One hopes it leads to determined action.
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