The crew of the Angel Flame received orders to head out. They had heard that time was running out – the distress signal had been heard 25 hours ago! So often people’s pride got in the way of what needed to be done. The powers that be had known the crew were available but they wanted to appear to be all knowing, all powerful. At the cost of the young girls’ lives. Hopefully it would not be too late to save them. Stealth was their secret: the men manning the boat would not see them coming from under the water. Nor would they see the submarine crew board their ship.
© Colline Kook-Chun, 2015
(This story was inspired by Mondays Finish the Story. Each week bloggers are encouraged to write a story of 100-150 words based on a photo prompt and sentence starter)
Oh, I love the mystery here – what exactly happened to the girls’ boat, who are the men? Fingers crossed the Angel Flame was called in time… Nicely done!
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Thank you Sonya. To answer all those questions I would defintely have to write more 🙂
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I hope the mission is successful. Watchful waiting is not always the best way to deal with situations. Nice feel of tension in the story.
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I agree – sometimes you have to get in and do something even if the action turns out to be a mistake.
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Well done! I enjoyed your story Colline! Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge! See you next week hopefully! Be well… ^..^
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I am hoping to get myself into a routine. Your prompts make for good writing practice 🙂
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Thank you Colline!
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Great use of the prompt.
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Thank you, I appreciate your comment.
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I hope they make it in time. It’s just typical of the higher-ups to delay calling them out.
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True. If they moved faster, lives could be saved.
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Fingers crossed they arrive in time to save the girls! So true about pride getting int the way….
Good story!
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Sometimes we need to think of the good of others in order to let go of our pride. A leader invested in her community would do this I think.
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Great story!
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Very well written, Colline. Now I want to know how it ends. Maybe another prompt will let you finish it.
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Thank you so much Sandra. I appreciate your comment.
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Woo hoo, they were saved! 🙂 Nice story!
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Thank you so much!
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nice story for the prompt C 🙂
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Thanks Yvette. 🙂
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Good story, hope the are on time to do something bout the girls.
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One always hopes that things go smoothly and they get there in time.
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Great story! It took us to the edge of a precipice and left us hanging by the teeth.
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Thank you Michelle. I appreciate your comment and encouragement 🙂
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The dangers that the pride of our leaders place us! Enjoyed the read!
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Thank you so much. And thank you for your positive comment.
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