A Reprieve

PHOTO PROMPT -Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The day should have been dreamy and filled with romance. They had spent it wandering around the beautifully restored town, hand in hand, with family and friends.  She dreaded, however, the time when she would be alone with Marc. The razor sharp words, the pinches, the painful slaps in places where bruises would not show. No-one would believe that the charming and attentive man who was her husband could be so cruel. He seemed to thrive on her pain and confusion. Closing her eyes, she allowed the warmth of the sun to comfort her. Maybe today she would find the courage to escape.

friday-fictioneers-badgeWhat gives her the courage to leave Marc?

© Colline Kook-Chun, 2015

(This post was inspired by Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle. The challenge asks for bloggers to write a story in 100 words or less in response to the photo prompt.)

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42 thoughts on “A Reprieve

  1. What would give her the courage? The realization that she has options. The story mentions spending the day with family and friends. This implies there are people nearby she can turn to. The story also mentions her beautifully restored town. This implies money and money creates options. Often when we find ourselves in seemingly inescapable situations it’s because we’ve convinced ourselves we have no options. Her thought that no one would believe her husband could be so cruel is an example of her convincing herself that she has no options. The reality is that most of her family and friends would believe, and most would help. Realizing her options would give her courage. It also would help to fully realize that staying is not an option, in fact it’s the only non-option she has.

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    1. Thank you so much. I am glad that you enjoyed it. It would definitely not fit in with the traditional idea of a Valentine’s story – though Marc would like people to believe that their relationship does.

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  2. Your stories are so good. You would excel at the 100 word challenge, I bet. I found out about it via Tess’ ‘How the cookie crumbles’ wordpress site. You may really enjoy her short stories, she is also a very good story writer.

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  3. Colleen, this is great writing and it brings to light once more the all too pervasive evil in our society – that of abusive relationships. In your story, I’d have already been gone, and he would be enjoying a nice cozy jail cell.

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    1. At times these women believe what they are being told by these men: that they are no good, that no-one would believe them, that they deserve what they have. I always hope that someday they find the courage and belief in themselves to leave the abusive relationship.

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  4. I like what Alex says about the options and I just hope that your heroine can see them. I fear that she is too cowed and hope one of her friends can help to give her the courage. A topic here in great need of further discussion and real action. The closing of refuges in times of ‘austerity’ do little to help women and their children in this situation.

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    1. I agree with you. So often these women have lost belief in themselves and their power to change their lives. One can only hope that someone comes into their lives to change that – and often the refuges can help them and their children begin again.

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  5. Dear Colline,

    Those razor sharp words leave deeper scars than the slaps. She needs to escape. In the second line it should be ‘spent’ not ‘spend’. Well done story that evokes a lot of emotion.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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